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Writing Competition 2020-2021 P.4

Topic: Write a story about Jack. Use the following pictures to write the story.

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4A

 

1st Place: Diores Michelle Veronica

There is a boy named Jack. He has a sweet tooth, and he likes to eat sugary food such as cakes, candies, and chocolate. He hates vegetables such as lettuce and peas. "Jack, tomorrow is your birthday. I'll make a cake for you." said mum. Jack dreams about the cream and the chocolate part on the cake, and he thinks it will be mouth-watering.

But the next day, mum ran out from the kitchen with a cake in her hands. Jack sees it and asked, "Mum, where is the cream?" Mum replied, "This is a veggie cake. There are lots of vegetables in it, such as broccoli, carrots, and tomatoes." Jack was shocked because he didn't expect to have a vegetable cake.

Jack was disappointed and ran towards the junk food cabinet to get some junk food. But to his surprise, all the junk food disappeared. "There is no need to search; I threw it all in the bin. It is for your goodwill, says the voice behind Jack!" Jack turned around and saw his mum. He was so sad and cried very loudly, but he could do nothing because mum didn't let him eat junk food.

 

2nd Place: Lui Kenji Yat Long

Jack always eats sugary food. He never eats vegetables or fruit. His mum was worried about him. One day before Jack's birthday, his mum said, "Jack, tomorrow is your birthday. I'll make a cake for you." Jack's mouth was watering; he thought it would be a delicious cake with a lot of cream and sugar.

The next day, mum took out a 'delicious' veggie cake. She said, "Jack, you eat too many sugary foods; why don't you eat more vegetables?" Jack was disappointed and angry. He ran back to his room and suddenly fell. Mum tried to talk to Jack, but he didn't say a single word. Mum took him to the hospital. When Jack finally woke up, the doctor said, "You eat too many sugary foods; you must eat less sugar and more vegetables." When Jack got back home, he ate the whole veggie cake! Mum was happy!

 

3rd Place:Cheuk Kwan Yin

Jack like to eat sugary food such as chocolate, cakes, and candies. However, he didn't want to eat vegetables. His mum was worried over him. "Tomorrow is Jack's birthday," mum says. So I'll make a cake for you. Jack is excited. He thinks the cake will be mouth-watering. So the next day, mum makes the cake. It is a veggie cake that contains a lot of broccoli, carrots and tomatoes. Jack was disappointed with his cake, but mum said, "You must eat the cake!" Jack tried the cake and thought it was yummy. So he ate most of the cake on his birthday! In the end, he eats a lot of vegetables. 

 

4B

 

1st Place: Cheng Caitlin Jane

Always remember to have a balanced diet, or they'll revenge on you. Jack loves to eat sugary food such as candies, sweets, cakes, and chocolates. He refuses to eat vegetables and proper meals. He only eats his favourite type of food: sugary food. As a result, Jack's mother felt terrible, as if Jack was overweight or too fat. She was right. Jack was a fat boy now. He just ate sweets all day long.

'Mmmm! Delicious! Mum, you MUST buy more sweets! We're running out of it!' Jack said, slightly impatient. Mum replied, 'Well, tomorrow's your birthday, and I will treat you to a delicious cake! It's much better than sweets! But you have to finish it all.' 'I will!' Jack said as he went looking, searching for more sweets.

'MOM! COME NOW! WHERE IS MY CAKE?' Jack screamed. 'Oh, yes, it's your birthday! Yes! I've got it; it is coming!' Mum said. 'Ok, I've got it! A veggie cake! Very yummy!' Mom grinned. Jack's face dropped. 'Mom! I HATE VEGGIES! How could you make this trash?' Jack said harshly. 'Well, you have made your promise, eh?' Mom laughed. Come on, get eating! It'll rot!' 'Fine!' shouted Jack as he almost puked the broccoli out. 'ERGH! Gross!' Jack screamed. 'And that's what you'll eat for snacks every day from now on!' Mom replied. 'NOO!' Jack shouted.

 

1st Place: Cheng Caitlin Jane

Always remember to have a balanced diet, or they'll revenge on you. Jack loves to eat sugary food such as candies, sweets, cakes, and chocolates. He refuses to eat vegetables and proper meals. He only eats his favourite type of food: sugary food. As a result, Jack's mother felt terrible, as if Jack was overweight or too fat. She was right. Jack was a fat boy now. He just ate sweets all day long.

'Mmmm! Delicious! Mum, you MUST buy more sweets! We're running out of it!' Jack said, slightly impatient. Mum replied, 'Well, tomorrow's your birthday, and I will treat you to a delicious cake! It's much better than sweets! But you have to finish it all.' 'I will!' Jack said as he went looking, searching for more sweets.

'MOM! COME NOW! WHERE IS MY CAKE?' Jack screamed. 'Oh, yes, it's your birthday! Yes! I've got it; it is coming!' Mum said. 'Ok, I've got it! A veggie cake! Very yummy!' Mom grinned. Jack's face dropped. 'Mom! I HATE VEGGIES! How could you make this trash?' Jack said harshly. 'Well, you have made your promise, eh?' Mom laughed. Come on, get eating! It'll rot!' 'Fine!' shouted Jack as he almost puked the broccoli out. 'ERGH! Gross!' Jack screamed. 'And that's what you'll eat for snacks every day from now on!' Mom replied. 'NOO!' Jack shouted.

 

3rd Place: Chong King Shing Kingsley

I have a friend named Jack. He loves eating candy such as chocolate and cupcakes. His mom is worried about his eating habits. At dinner time, his mom tries to make him eat many vegetables such as carrots and spinach. But Jack always refuses because he hates vegetables. Tomorrow is Jack's birthday, so mum says, 'Since tomorrow is your birthday, I'll make a cake for you.' Jack was shocked! He has never seen his mom bake a cake before.

He thought that the different flavours of the cake might be mango, chocolate, or strawberry. When Jack woke up, he ran into the living room to see the cake. The first thing he heard was mum screaming, 'Happy Birthday!' Then he saw the cake and asks 'What flavour is it?' Mom said, 'It's a veggie cake.' Jack was sad because he hates vegetables. But when he ate it. It was sweet and delicious. He asked, 'Why is it so sweet?' Mom said, 'Because the vegetables are fake and that it is a chocolate cake.

 
4C
 

1st Place: Wong Sze Yan

"Jack!" Jack's mom shouted. "How many times have I told not to eat so much sugary food! You will get cavity on your teeth!" So finally, at lunch, Jack's mom said, "Jack, eat more vegetables. They contain a lot of vitamins and minerals. They are good for you." But Jack kept refusing, and this made his mum very worried.

One day, mom said, "Jack, tomorrow is your birthday. I'll make a cake for you.! Just thinking of the beautiful and mouth-watering cake made Jack excited. The next day: "Jack! Here is a healthy and a scrumptious veggie cake." Jack was shocked and disappointed. Jack said, "This cake doesn't even look appetizing, and it's made from broccoli, carrots and tomatoes."

"Jack, take a bite. You will love it for sure!" So Jack took a bite. "I guess it isn't that bad." And from then on, Jack ate more vegetables and became healthier by the day.

 

2nd Place: Chow Hei Yuet Ellie

Today, my mummy read me a story about Jack's birthday surprise. So let me tell you the story. It was Jack's birthday. Jack's mum told Jack, "Jack, tomorrow is your birthday. I will bake a cake for you." When Jack heard about it, he was overjoyed with happiness. But, mum had known that Jack always eats junk food such as chocolate, cakes, and sweets. He never eats vegetables such as beans and peas.

The next day, mum made a cake, but it wasn't a regular cake; it was a veggie cake made from broccoli, carrots, and tomatoes. Jack was so disappointed. He said," Yuk! What is that?" Mum said, "Try it first, and you will like it." So, Jack tried some.

After some time, the cake was gone! Mum asked Jack, "Where is the cake?" Jack said, "It is all in my tummy! Yummy!" From now on, Jack ate more vegetables and ate less junk food. From this story, I have learnt to healthy food and try something new.

 

3rd Place: Gun Yan Sheung

Jack is six years old. He likes to eat sugary food such as candy, cakes and so on. He never eats fruit and vegetables or whole-grain products such as rice and noodles or dairy products like milk or cheese.

One day, mum talked to Jack. She said, "Jack, tomorrow is your birthday; I'll make a cake for you to celebrate your birthday." "Jack said, "Hurray!" So the next day, mum made a cake for Jack. She used vegetables such as broccoli, carrots and tomatoes. Jack felt surprised because he doesn't like to eat vegetables. Mum said to Jack, "You should eat more grain products and dairy products because it gives you healthy teeth and strong bones. Also, vegetables because can give you a lot of vitamins and minerals. After that, Jack ate more vegetables, fruit, grain products, and dairy products. He became healthier and have a strong body now.       

 

4D

 

1st Place: Yip Sze Yin

Jack was a fat boy. He loved eating sugary food such as sweets, chocolate, ice cream, and cupcakes. He hated vegetables and fruit like lettuce and apples because he thought they were tasteless. But mum always suggested to Jack, "You ought to eat more vegetables and fruit because they contain vitamins and minerals to keep us healthy. You also need to eat less sugary food because they are bad for your teeth."

Although mum said this to Jack many times before, he didn't listen to her. Finally, one day, Mum happily said, "Jack, tomorrow is your birthday. I'll make a lovely cake for you ." Jack felt excited because he thought it would be a chocolate cake, and he replied," Yeah!"

The next day, Mum sang," Happy birthday to you!" Then, she took out the vegetable cake. Jack felt sad and angry. Finally, he asked angrily," Why is it such a yucky vegetable cake?" Mum asked," What kind of cake did you want?" Jack replied, "A chocolate cake!"

"Ok, if you eat the vegetable cake, then I will bake you a chocolate cake too, "mum sighed. So Jack ate a bit of the veggie cake and said, "Wow, it is yummy!" After that day, Jack loved eating vegetables and fruit!

 

1st Place: Yip Sze Yin

Jack was a fat boy. He loved eating sugary food such as sweets, chocolate, ice cream, and cupcakes. He hated vegetables and fruit like lettuce and apples because he thought they were tasteless. But mum always suggested to Jack, "You ought to eat more vegetables and fruit because they contain vitamins and minerals to keep us healthy. You also need to eat less sugary food because they are bad for your teeth."

Although mum said this to Jack many times before, he didn't listen to her. Finally, one day, Mum happily said, "Jack, tomorrow is your birthday. I'll make a lovely cake for you ." Jack felt excited because he thought it would be a chocolate cake, and he replied," Yeah!"

The next day, Mum sang," Happy birthday to you!" Then, she took out the vegetable cake. Jack felt sad and angry. Finally, he asked angrily," Why is it such a yucky vegetable cake?" Mum asked," What kind of cake did you want?" Jack replied, "A chocolate cake!"

"Ok, if you eat the vegetable cake, then I will bake you a chocolate cake too, "mum sighed. So Jack ate a bit of the veggie cake and said, "Wow, it is yummy!" After that day, Jack loved eating vegetables and fruit!

 

3rd Place: Poon Lik Hang Coen

Once, there was a boy called Jack. He loved eating sugary foods and hated eating vegetables. But his mum didn't like his behavior, so then she decided to do something about it. So, that night, Jack's mum hatched his plan. She said to Jack, "Since it is your birthday tomorrow, I will bake a special cake for you!" Jack was so excited. His favourite cake was chocolate cake with sprinkles and cream. He wished that his mum will make it for him. ( Spoiler alert: His wish didn't come true.)

Today was Jack's birthday. He was dreaming all day of this delicious chocolate cake with sprinkles and cream, so he didn't even notice when his teacher asked him a question. So when he got home from school, his mum surprised him with a veggie cake! The chocolate was replaced by carrots, with tomato sprinkles, with broccoli cream on the top.

Now Jack understood he had overeaten sugary food and served his punishment by eating a veggie cake. So now Jack follows a balanced diet, and he eats a lot of vegetables. All way well!