Young Writer 2016-2017 P.3

Place: 1st place

Class: 3A

Name: Allen Li

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny were walking in the woods. They were very happy. They were very hot and very hungry. Suddenly, they saw a candy house. "Great! I am hungry- Would you like to eat some candy with me, Jacky"? Danny asked politely, licking his lips.

"Um… Ok," said Jacky who was worried. They walked into the house. "Oh, my word!" They shouted. Everything the door, the windows, the roof, the floor, the walls and even the chimney were made from candy! "Yay! Let's eat!' said Danny. And they ate all the candy lying on the table. "You always eat too much candy," said Jacky, "Stop eating please!"

Their voices woke up the lion who was sleeping outside under the tree. The lion was suspicious so he ran to the house. The boys did not manage to get away, and were eaten by the lion. So, remember never to speak too loudly. It might get the attention of others and they might attack you. 

Place: 2nd place

Class: 3A

Name: Claire Cheng

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny went hiking in the forest. In the meanwhile, they saw a candy house. They went inside to have a look around. Danny enjoys eating so he entered the house excitedly. There were all sorts of sweets and various kinds of biscuits.

Danny ate lots and lots of candy. He is so greedy, and Jacky was worried about him. He cried "Don't eat too much, you'll catch a cough or end up with a tooth ache". Danny was full but he did not listen to what Jacky had to say. He cried so loudly that it scared the lion who was sleeping under the tree. The lion was furious so it ran into the candy house and frightened the boys. They ran away from the house as quickly as they could.

At last, Danny learned it is not good to be greedy. 

Place: 3rd place

Class: 3A

Name: Matthew Chan

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny went hiking, so they went to a forest. Suddenly, they saw a candy house. They went inside. They were happy. They ate a lot of candies. Danny was full but, Jacky was worried because a lion was coming.

He tried to stop the lion but it was too powerful. The lion ran into the candy house and chased them around the table. Jacky tried to hurt it but it did not work. They were frightened and they ran away. In the end they managed to get away from the candy house and the furious lion.

Place: 1st place

Class: 3B

Name: Jeddy Kwok Tze Yuet

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny went hiking in the forest. They walked up a hill and saw some glamorous flowers and gorgeous trees they have never seen before.

One day, they saw a candy house with chocolates on the roof top and lollies covering the wall. Danny licked his lips "These candies look mouthwatering" he thought. They went inside happily. When they got inside, they saw everything on the dining table was made from candy. Danny ate and ate as much as he could, but Jacky warned him "Don't eat too much! You may end up with a toothache". Danny didn't really care and ate until he was full.

Suddenly, a lion ran into the house. Danny was so full he couldn't run very fast. They both were frightened. In the end, a zoo janitor came to catch the lion because it had run away for a few days. The boys giggled happily. 

Place: 2nd place

Class: 3B

Name: Yip Ho Ching, Evan

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny went hiking on the hill. They walked into the forest and they both felt very hungry. They wanted to eat some food.

Later, they saw a candy house. Danny said, "Let's go inside!" and see if we can find something to eat. They ran inside as fast as they could. In the house, they saw lots and lots of candy. Danny grabbed some candy and ate it. Jacky was worried. He was scared that Danny may end up with a toothache. Suddenly, a lion came in and attacked Danny. He was badly injured. Jacky was frightened and he tried to run away.

 In the end Jacky saved Danny and they managed to run off into the forest. The lion tried to chase them but he was hurt. What a scary adventure. 

Place: 3rd place

Class: 3B

Name: Buzz Choi

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny felt bored at home and had a good idea. They wanted to go for a hike. They were very happy.

When they were hiking, they felt very hungry and wanted to eat some food. They saw a beautiful house and it was called 'Candy House'. This time around they were very hungry, and they rushed into the house. Inside the Candy House were lots of candies and they all looked very beautiful. Danny wanted to eat some of the candy, but Jacky said, "Don't eat them!". Danny didn't listen to what Jacky have said and ate a handful of candy very quickly. "Yummy!" He said these candies are the best.

Suddenly, a lion rushed into the Candy House. It 'roared' loudly! "Today I am very hungry, and I want to eat you!" They were scared and they ran out quickly. After they got home, they said together "What an unlucky day". 

Place: 1st place

Class: 3C

Name: Bobo Lui

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny went to the forest to play and to have some fun. Suddenly, Danny saw a candy house and he wanted to go inside.

Danny was very hungry and he saw a table with lots of candy on it. He tucked in and ate as many candies as he could. Jacky worried about him and tried to stop Danny, but it was far too late. His tummy was full and loaded with candy and he had a toothache.

In the end, a lion came into the house and wanted to eat them. They were sacred so, they tried to run away but Danny could not. Jacky saw that Danny was un able to move and that the lion was getting closer and closer to him. Jacky fought with the lion until it ran away. He was so brave! They are save and Danny will never eat candy again. 

Place: 2nd place

Class: 3C

Name: Luke Raven

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny went walking in the forest. Suddenly, they saw a house. They went closer to have a look, it was a candy shop. Then, they went inside, and saw lots of candy. Danny loved eating candy, so he started eating all the candy as soon as he could.

After a while, Danny was full but he had a toothache. Suddenly, a lion came rushing in. Jacky had plenty of time to run away, but Danny could not move because he had a tummy ache. But then Jacky picked up a stick a smacked the lion on its head. The lion got frightened and it ran away and never came back again. 

Place: 3rd place

Class: 3C

Name: Andrea Lee

It was a sunny day. Jack and Danny were walking in the forest. They are tired and they decided to stop for a short water break. Suddenly, a candy house appeared in front of them. They were amazed to see so many different kind of candies and quietly went inside.

Danny tried some of the sweets. 'It is delicious' he said, and he ate them all. Jacky was worried about Danny so he said, 'Don't eat so many candies, you might end up with a toothache'.

A lion jumped into the house and 'ROARED' at them. They were frightened. Danny was hurt! They wanted to run away but they could not, because the lion was blocking their way. Jacky, kicked the lion and it ran away. 

Place: 1st place

Class: 3D

Name: Carrie Wong

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny were hiking in the forest. They were talking happily. A while later they saw a beautiful house made from candy standing in front of them. Jacky said, 'Let's go inside and see if there is something yummy to eat'. Danny said, 'Okay! It sounds like a great idea. I do feel a bit hungry though'.

They went inside the candy house and tried to find something delicious to eat. Danny wanted to try all the candies he could see, but Jacky felt a bit worried and told him 'Don't eat too much Danny. You might end up with a toothache or even a sore belly'. Suddenly a roaring lion jumps into the candy house. Jacky and Danny were frightened and they didn't know what to do. Jacky ran through the open door and away from the house. Danny tried to run away but he had a tummy ache and fell flat on the floor.

Luckily, Jacky called the police and they took the lion away from the candy house. They were saved, but Danny needed to see the doctor very soon.

Place: 2nd place

Class: 3D

Name: Ivana Woo

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny were hiking through the forest. 'I'm tired' said Jacky with a dip in his voice, 'Me too' said Danny!

They walked and walked. Suddenly, they saw a candy house. They looked at each other and Danny said to Jacky 'Let's go inside and have a few treats to eat!". They went in and felt amazed about the prettiness of this little house. As they entered the house, they saw a huge round table with about fifteen yummy candies on it. Danny couldn't wait, he was so hungry and ate all of it. Jacky was a bit worried about the owner, and what he would do if he finds them in his house.

As he was thinking of what could possibly happen, a lion appeared out of no wear. Danny was too full to run or even to move, so I grabbed him by his arm and pulled him out of the candy house. We ran as quickly as we can without looking back. 'We are save now' Jacky said happily. And they managed to find their way home. 

Place: 3rd place

Class: 3D

Name: Natalie Tam

It was a sunny day. Jacky and Danny went hiking over a hill. When they reached the top of the hill, they saw a candy house in the distance and walk towards it. As they got closer to the door, they tried to open it but it was stuck. They tried and tried very hard, and suddenly it swings open. 'The door is open' Jacky shouts happily.

After a while they entered the house. Danny loves eating, and after seeing all the candies he opened his big mouth and ate as much as he can. Jacky is worried about Danny and tells him "Don't eat too much or else you will end up with a toothache'. Danny doesn't really care much and he continues to eat all the sweet treats until he can't eat any more. We left the house. Suddenly, a lion was running towards us. We were scared and tried to run away, but Danny's tooth and tummy were aching and he couldn't get away. I pulled him down the hill and into safety. 'You shouldn't eat so many candies. It's not good for your health' Jacky says. Then, they both went home safely.

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